Tuesday, May 28, 2013

Book Review: The Morning Star by Tania Penn

Title: The Morning Star
Series: The Morning Star #1
Author: Tania Penn
Pages: 227
Pub Date: January 10, 2013
Publisher: Penn Pal Publishing
Book Source: From the author
My Rating: 2 of 5 stars


(From Goodreads) Being the daughter of Lucifer keeps seventeen year old Dawn Belial busy. For almost her entire lifetime, she has been trying to think of a way to free her Archangel mother, Michaela, whom her father has held captive for centuries. She's also attending high school - balancing trigonometry, history, and recruiting souls for her father along with her wicked half-sister, Venus.

There has been no time for love until she meets mysterious Gabriel, a British exchange student. As they fall in love against their will, she discovers a startling secret about him, and a shocking connection to her mother that changes everything.

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It's been some time since I've written a negative review; at least 4-5 months. Unfortunately, here I am to break that streak.


~ Editing. This book needs so much editing! I say this because the grammar was absolutely awful—so much so that it took away from the story for me. First we have the dreaded too/to and then/than issue—that alone is enough to make me want to put the book down immediately. Couple that with a hundred fragmented sentences and tons of slip ups in tense, and you have a hot mess. It shouldn't take so much effort to read a book! I felt like I should quit reading it and start editing it instead. I had some examples highlighted on my Kindle, but unfortunately, I stupidly deleted the book before I could begin my review. But trust me, it's bad. Please, future authors, EDIT EDIT EDIT. Please? :) I don't want to read your story if I have to lose my reading flow due to a then/than mistake. Ack!

~ Why oh why do authors do the insta-love thing when they know we hate it?! I am having trouble understanding this! Not only was there insta-love, but once the “relationship” aged a bit, I still didn't see any basis for love. These two know next to nothing about each other. They're both hiding immense secrets, and the relationship is a lie from beginning to end. The author is supposed to make us believe in what they're writing, and for this romance I saw nothing but words on a page. I couldn't connect and that makes me sad.

~ Dawn loves her daddy a little too much. I am so angry at myself for deleting the book from my Kindle because, yet again, I could show you an example of what I am talking about. Sigh. Anyway, Dawn gives off a weird vibe about her father. In the beginning of the book she describes her father's drop-dead gorgeous physique, his charming face, his way with the ladies, etc. Had I not already known the girl was talking about her father, I would've assumed she was checking out some guy at a bar. I mean, the way she described him and the way she talked about his looks seemed unnatural and sort of gross.

~ The plot was messy. I think there were just too many ideas and they weren't well laid out; they were just mashed together. It felt like the author was getting ahead of herself; not finishing one thing before starting another, and getting lost in it. A lot of the story seemed sequentially wrong, and there were characters popping in that had no purpose. Silas, for example. For one thing, the guy randomly shows up about 75% of the way through and Dawn is talking about him like he's her inevitable future mate because she and Gabriel are oh-so-forbidden. She talks about him like he means A LOT to her, but I don't remember her even thinking about this guy until he randomly shows up to make out with her and grope her against the hood of a car at about 75%. Color me confused. I'm still sitting here with a big ol' question mark over my head.

Not only do you have random characters making pointless appearances, but you have this weird side-story about Dawn's high school life. Dead cheerleaders and random crap that seems like nothing more than filler. It seemed like it was just easier for the author to flesh out the more mundane, contemporary parts of the story than to really focus on world-building and making her paranormalities more believable.

~ Terrible protagonist. I have to say that Dawn was a real letdown in the way of heroines. She was much too gullible and na├»ve for someone who has supposedly “lived for centuries”. Not only that, but she is a real pushover. She talks a lot of game, but doesn't back it up. She let's everyone around her do all the decision making. She is a follower. She doesn't think for herself half the time and she definitely doesn't seem to have the wisdom that should come with age—especially centuries of it!

Now, I may not have liked this book, but that's not to say I can't admit that it was an original idea. I like that it was something I've never read before, but that just makes it all the more disappointing that it didn't meet my expectations. :( The plot was unique at it's core and it had potential, but definitely fell short for me.

Overall, this book wasn't for me. It needed editing. The romance was the worst kind. The characters weren't well-developed. The plot was messy and there were too many people and events in the story that had no purpose. It was slow-moving and tough to finish. I won't be coming back for book 2, unfortunately. The Morning Star was wasted potential. I don't recommend this book.